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Rarity's employees at the Carousel Boutique had just finished drawing the blinds and hanging the "Closed" sign in the window when they heard the gentle tapping of their boss' hooves on the polished floor to draw their attention.

A brisk smile crossed her alabaster face as her red rimmed glasses settled onto her nose. "Well done, darlings. Now that you've finished I'd like to take a few moments to discuss all the orders for the GGG as well as give you the overview for this year's Fall collection."

She turned and summoned a cork board festooned with drawings and fabric swatches from the back room with the glittering magic from her horn. "I'll be returning to Canterlot tomorrow to oversee the work at The Bijou personally, so you'll be on your own until I return for the Summer Sun Celebration."

At this her two assistants, Snips the apprentice tailor and Thimble the seamstress, exchanged a concerned glance. Rarity usually preferred to keep a tight rein on the Gala dresses her boutique produced.

She let out a small sigh. "I do so wish I could stay a bit longer in Ponyville, but that's how it is, I suppose." She caught herself and gave them a warm smile. "Not that I don't trust you darlings to do an excellent job while I'm away. I have absolute faith in the both of you."

Her employees both returned her smile with a grateful nod, beaming discreetly at the compliment. A wistful look crossed Rarity's porcelain toned face as she resumed her speech. "No, it's just I'd hoped to be here for..."

She shook aside her reverie and drew herself up, assuming a businesslike expression as she turned to the board and focused a spot of glittering magic from the tip of her horn on one of the drawings, causing it to light up slightly. "Well, enough woolgathering, as it were. Lets get down to it, shall we? The overall theme I'm going to be exploring with the fall collection is..."

She cut off abruptly as the front door to the boutique slammed open. All three unicorns turned as one to see a vibrant pink pony frantically jogging in place in oversized galoshes, each hoof fall sending a burst of rainwater out the top of each boot and onto the growing puddle of muddy water on the meticulously cleaned floor.

Her face was matted and streaked with pallid white, and her mane hung straight in heavy, dripping sheets, framing a pair of wildly glazed blue eyes. She stopped dancing in place and planted her hooves, suddenly overtaken by a vibrating shudder that sent a cloud of water droplets into the air around her, splashing onto an organza ball gown that stood in an alcove next to her.

Rarity's hoof went to her mouth with a gasp of shock, but the crazed mare in the door abruptly stopped shaking and started rapidly jogging in place again, letting loose a barrage of rapid fire speech in a rising crecendo.


Her frantic prancing swiveled her away from the three dumbfounded unicorns and just as suddenly as she'd appeared she accelerated back out the door, splitting the puddle she'd made into a V shaped wave splashing more muddy water on the delicate dresses to either side of the entry.

Rarity's employee's heads swiveled to face her as she stood boggling, mouthing the torrent of words to herself with her ears laid back in concentration. She blinked, then her eyes went wide as well. "Fluttershy? Now? Is something wrong? Your mane's never like that unless something is wrong!"

The white unicorn's horn sparked to life and wrenched her glasses off, tossing them carelessly aside as she bolted for the door, rushing pell mell into the downpour. "Pinkie, wait for meee!"

Snips floated his employer's spectacles from where his magic had caught them in midair and folded them carefully before slipping them into a small hidden pocket behind the lapel of his vest, and then turned toward the door, willing it shut with a flick of his horn.

Thimble gave him a sidelong look. "Could you make sense out of any of that?"

The chubby, blue-green unicorn stallion sauntered over to the mess by the door, giving it a quick glance over before he turned and headed for the back room. He gave the seamstress a genteel smile. "I've got some educated guesses, Miss Thimble, but only because I've lived here all my life and am acquainted with Miz Rarity's friends. I'm going to get on the horn to the girls up at the Bijou. If what I think is happening is happening, then the grape vine needs to start shaking, as it were. If you'll be so kind as to see to the stock up front, I'll be back in a moment with a mop."

With a short bow to the older mare, he glided out of the room as Thimble tentatively stepped forward to examine the mud splattered organza gowns.

She leapt back with a shriek as the door slammed open, narrowly missing her flank and revealing the waterlogged form of a tan stallion draped in a dark green rain slicker with muddy, bright magenta galoshes squeaking on his hooves.

He spat out the handle of his umbrella, allowing the canopy to rest on his sodden head. "Did a bright pink mare just pass by?"

The seamstress pointed a shaking hoof past him into the night and rain shrouded town square. "She-she went thataway..."

He nodded to her and gripped the umbrella handle in his teeth again. "Thankfth!"

With that, he turned and galloped away, the umbrella flipping inside out with a pop as he trailed it behind him.

Thimble numbly nudged the door closed with her horn. She shook her head to clear it as she turned her attention to the gowns again.

Another slam, another shriek, this time accompanied by a prodigious leap backward on the beige unicorn mare's part that sent her crashing into a rack of sun dresses.

The tan stallion in the pink boots was back, panting with his teeth clenched on the inverted umbrella, an earnest but glazed look on his face. "Fthorry about fthartling you there!" With an apologetic little half bow, he turned and galloped away again.

Thimble climbed shakily to her hooves and closed the door, and then began to shove ponikins and display cases against it with her magic.

The characters depicted in this fiction are copyright and trademarks of Hasbro, Inc. This is a work of fan fiction, and the author makes no claim on Hasbro's copyright or trademarks.

A My Little Pony - Friendship Is Magic Fan Fiction.

This story is set several years after the events depicted in Season 1.

Part 2

Pinkie Pie's Pinkie Sense has gone off in a big way, sending her galloping into the rain, and soon she's got Rarity following in her frantic hoofsteps.

Part 3->[link]
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CodWars Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Luffy-Kun Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I had no idea Snips could speak. Lol. Interesting that he became Rarity's apprentice.

Aww, you make me want to love CarmelPie because you make me love Carmel. (I'm a pretty big DashiePie fan though)
Mark-Firehaven Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
*Slaps thy face* HE SPOKE LIKE EIGHT TIIIIIIIIMES in Boast Busters. I didn't count. And by times I clearly mean scenes. He said more than eight lines.

I see your sig contains shipping favs... Why is a. nobody capatalized, and b. Luna alone. She was on THA MOOOOOON for a thousand years, but come on! She can't be forever alone! Or are you implying Luna made a clone and sexytimed with it? Actually... that would make a good fic... SOMEBODY WRITE THAT! I DO NOT WANT TO BE KNOWN AS THE GUY WHO WROTE LUNA X LUNA CLOP THAT SOMEHOW GOT FAMOUS AND END UP LIKE THE GUY WHO MADE CUPCAKES AND ONLY HAVE THE ONE STORY EVER TALKED ABOUT! Actually, I have two stories on FimFiction, one that is decent, and the other a cult classic of fics in few views but unanimously good... I think I will write it! But it will have to be on the moon in the past, since she has friends now... You have unintentionally doomed us all, since I will make this a good story!
Luffy-Kun Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I meant more along the lines of him "speaking" so eloquently.

I liked the look of the small print.
OH! "LuNa" means LuffyxNami as in One Piece.
I actually ship TwiLuna in MLP:FIM >.>
Mark-Firehaven Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013
I never made that Luna X Luna fic. Curse you, ADHD, curse you.
Luffy-Kun Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That would be hilarious though, the "younger" Luna from episode one and the older one with the sexy hair in the later ones.
TheLolpocalypse Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2012
But... he always talks, lol... And why do you always have to mention your love for homosexual ponies lol? Seems a bit weird that you have to make some sort of mention of it in all the chapters
Luffy-Kun Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Not so fluently. And not "homosexual" ponies. Different pairings. I am a pretty strict shipper. Its rare for me to read things outside my pairing comfort zone. His story makes me more open to a pairing I usually shy from (CarmelPie)
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012
Well, with a name like "Snips" and a pair of scissors for a cutie mark, it seems that either tailor or barber are likely professions for the young fellow.
HolyCross9 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
Something's wrong with the text on DA. I had to download it to read it entirely.
DynamicDragon11 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
You do realize there's a scroll bar at the bottom, right?
HolyCross9 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2012
Yes, but I'm very uncomfortable reading it like that. So I had to download it on a seperate window.
BlackWidower Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011  Professional Writer
Um. Why would they have umbrellas that you would have to actively balance in your teeth to use? Those seem difficult to use for them. It'd make more sense if they had umbrellas that you could strap to your back.
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011
Actually, I believe back mounted umbrellas have appeared in the show.

Short answer, 'cos a mouth carried umbrella is just funnier, even though it makes it difficult to sing in the rain.
BlackWidower Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011  Professional Writer
UH! Lauren Faust would roll over in her grave if she wasn't alive.

[link] Q18
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2011
Ah, but she's talking about ponies carrying umbrellas around in their hooves like they're using freaky one fingered hands. Which in turn would force them to either walk with three legs or rear up on their back legs for longer than they ought to.

Carrying them in their mouths is natural enough, and it keeps the rain off of their heads better than a back mounted model.

Plus, how could they raise or lower it if it's strapped on their backs out of reach of both mouth and hooves?
nemryn Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Pinkie's outburst broke the frame, whoops!
TempestRunner Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
This is pretty food stuff, I'll keep reading!
BlackWidower Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011  Professional Writer
Yes, I'll bet it tastes delicious.
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