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Caramel's voice sounded from deep in the closet by the door, his mellow tan hindquarters the only thing visible as he rooted about, his brown tail lashing in mild agitation. "Sweetheart, do you know where I put my umbrella?"

Pinkie Pie's chipper voice called out over a faint clattering from the direction of the kitchen. "You left it hanging on the coat pegs by the back door."

The earth pony stallion backed out of the closet and trotted across the empty tile floor of Sugarcube Corner and disappeared through a swinging door marked "Employees Only". A couple of moments later his plaintive call came from the store room. "Aw, now where did I leave my rain slicker? It was just here yesterday!"

Pinkie's voice in the kitchen chirped in reply. "On the rack in the bathroom, remember? From when Snails brought Gummy over from Froggy Bottom Bog for his weekly bath!"

"Oh right, how could I forget?" Came the stallion's mildly pained reply as he cantered out of the back room shaking his head, an umbrella hanging by it's hook from his withers. He made his way around one of the side counters and up the stairs.

Pinkie replied with a giggle over the sound of pots and bowls being moved around. "The same way you always forget things silly. It's like it's your special talent or something. I'd certainly never forget wrestling a thirty two hoof long alligator all the way up the back steps and into the bathtub, especially since we do it every week. That's some impressive forgetting right there." There was a dull thud of a heavy bag striking a tabletop. "Ooh! You know what? I bet that's why you only have three horseshoes as a cutie mark instead of four."

Caramel let out a sigh as he came trotting down the stairs, a shiny green rain slicker draped over his back along with the umbrella. "I remember Gummy's bath time, sweetheart." He quietly suppressed a shudder while casting about at the bottom of the stairs. "Now I don't remember where I left my galoshes."

Pinkie's voice took on an apologetic tone. "You left them on the back porch. They're probably just full to the brim with water right now, which totally defeats the whole point of galoshes, doesn't it? Why don't you wear mine? They're in the front closet."

The tan stallion walked back to the closet and craned his neck inside, coming back out with a quartet of boots in his teeth made of almost florescent magenta rubber.

He set them down and cocked his head dubiously as he looked at them. "Uh... I dunno, sweetheart... I don't think they... uh... fit me."

Another giggle came from the kitchen. "Just loosen the straps, gumdrop. They'll stretch."

The stallion pursed his lips and let out a sigh of imminent defeat. "But... but they're... pink."

At this, the door to the kitchen swung open and a slightly pouting, cotton candy colored face dusted with sugar and flour poked out and fixed him with a pair of limpid blue eyes that narrowed indignantly. "Hey. What's wrong with pink?"

Caramel hung his head with a soft chuckle and trotted over to his fiancees side, nuzzling her gently behind the ear, which caused the tiny gem studded horseshoes on her engagement earring to twinkle in the lights. "Nothing at all, sugar. It just doesn't look as good on me as it does on a certain mare I know."

Pinkie Pie gave a little hop, and turned her head so she was nose to nose with the tan stallion. "Ooh! You know I love guessing games! Is it Twilight Sparkle? She's got that super neat pink stripe in her mane and tail."

Caramel's face fell for a moment as his train of thought derailed, but with an ease born of hard practice he switched tracks. He gave her a weary smile and a peck on the nose and then walked back to the galoshes, settling down to loosen the straps and push his hooves into them. "NoOo. I'll give you a hint, sweetheart. She's the only pony I'd be willing to go out in this downpour for, especially wearing a set of bright pink booties."

She tapped her chin with a hoof as she turned back toward the kitchen. "Hmmmm. Fluttershy?"

Caramel breathed out another sigh as he got back to his feet. "Close... but no."

Now fully, if slightly ridiculously, girded against the lashing rain that pattered against the shop's windows outside, he followed her as she made her way to the center island where a large mixing bowl, a bag of flour, and a flour sifter waited. On one corner was a white cardboard pastry box wrapped in pink cling wrap and neatly tied off with string.

Pinkie picked up the flour in her fore hooves and dumped a measure of it into the sifter as Caramel took hold of the box's strings in his teeth and craned his neck to place it on his shoulders, then shifted the cape of the rain slicker so it was better protected.

When he turned back to face her, he gave her a sly grin. "I'll give you one more hint, sugar. She's the all over pinkest, sweetest, most beautiful mare this side of Equestria."

Her blue eyes crossed slightly in what passed for pensiveness for her. "Berry Punch?"

The tan stallion's face settled into a befuddled expression that was all too common for him. "Uh... no. She's more purple."


"She's what I'd call... uh... mauve, I guess. And, um... still no."

"Diamond Tiara?"

"What? No way. Well, okay, she's pink, but she's definitely not who I'm talking about."

"Princess Celestia?"

The tan stallion furrowed his brows with the usual sinking feeling that the conversation was about to buck him off. "Princess Celestia isn't pink."

"I know, right? But try telling that to Hasb..." She stopped and gave a little hop. "Ooh! Is it Lotus?" Her face took on a puzzled expression. "Or wait, Aloe? I can never remember which twin is the pink one."

Caramel blinked several times before he shook his head. "Now that you mention it, neither can I. Of course, I don't ever go to the spa except to pick up that mane conditioner you like."

Pinkie set the flour down on the counter cocked an eyebrow at him. "What were we trying to figure out here?"

Her fiance puffed out his cheeks and let out a heavy sigh. "I... I forget..."

She let out a giggle punctuated by a snort and shook her head. "You're adorable! Promise me you won't forget the way back from Sweet Apple Acres."

The tan stallion rolled his eyes. "I won't! Geez, I only worked there for like five years."

Pinkie nodded in satisfaction. "Good. When you get back, I'll have fresh bread right out of the oven to go with some hot rutabaga soup." She gave him a wink. "And there's some other ways I can help you get warmed up too."

Caramel's knees buckled a little as he flushed a bright red across his cheeks.

He shook his head and assumed a look of exaggerated resolve. "Well! With that kind of reward waiting for me, I'd better set out on my mission! Dare the dark and the rain and the wind to deliver one box of pfeffer... paffer... uh, peppernoogie... Um..."

The steely glint in his eye kind of went out of focus as he turned to the busily baking mare of his fancy. "What are these things called again?"

She giggled. "Pfeffernusse. They're my Mama's favorite type of cookie. So I thought they'd be good for a Mama to be." Pinkie replied matter-of-factly. "Although MY Mama might like them because they kind of look like little rocks but you can eat 'em."

Pinkie pursed her lips and gave him a solemn look. "Rocks were always kind of important to my family."

She resumed her breezy tone with a flick of her frizzy magenta mane. "I changed the recipe a little and put in oodles of pistachios because last time I went to visit Fluttershy she said she had this totally intense craving for pistachios, which is something I can work with. I mean more than the pickles or the pimentos although I suppose I could have done some kind of savory bread with olives in it and that would have been okay but savory foods and me are kind of like dragons and bicycles."

Caramel could only blink at her. "Dragons and..."

She continued without missing a beat. "Nothing to do with one another. Although if you gave Spike a tricycle I bet he'd be as cute as all get out. And we could race! I wonder if there's a place where you can rent tricycles in Canterlot. " She turned and looked at Caramel as if expecting an answer.

He felt a mild tic in his left eye. Finally, his hard won instincts kicked in and he leapt for the last trailing thread of the conversation he could reach. "Okay. Pafeffermoose. Got it. On my way."

She smiled at him as she turned, pausing before she wrapped her mouth around the handle of the sifter. "Hurry back. Tell Mackie and the girls I said hi!"

With that, she lifted the metal canister over the mixing bowl and began sifting its contents into it. Caramel nodded and turned to go, pausing at the door before trotting back to her side. He sidled up to her with a smile and leaned in to plant a kiss on her cheek. "Whoops. Almost forgot to do this."

The sides of her mouth curled up into a smile around the handle of the sifter as she gave him a sidelong glance with a flutter of her eyelashes.

Suddenly, her blue eyes went wide as a violent shudder shook her along the length of her body from nose to tail, lifting her hooves off the floor in a staccato cadence and sending a mushroom cloud of flour out of the sifter and into the air over the two ponies' heads.

When his fiancee's shaking just as abruptly stopped, Caramel let out a strained cough and blinked the powder out of his eyes. Pinkie's face and forelock were completely white, and an expression of shock and incredulity played across her features as the sifter dropped out of her mouth and into the bowl with a clank, throwing up a softer puff of flour.

Her voice came low and soft, causing eddies in the cloud of ingredients that enveloped them. "A... a doozy!" She turned and grabbed Caramel by his cheeks with both hooves, pulling his gaze to hers. "A DOOZY!"

The stallion stuttered out a reply as the violent shaking overtook her again. "A-a-a Wh-wh-what?"

His head kept bobbing up and down as she released it and clomped her hooves back on the floorboards, her ears perked and her nose raised as if she were following a scent on the air. The rattling of her hooves stopped as she went still again, more flour billowing in the air around her.

Just as the tan stallion got his head to stop nodding, she turned to him and locked eyes. "Sweet Apple Acres! It's at... Fluttershy!"

A huge, gasp escaped her as she leapt bodily into the air, each hoof spinning in a different direction. She pivoted in mid leap and rocketed toward the back door, sending it open with a crash as she hurtled through it. She paused a moment and leapt into Caramel's forgotten galoshes, sending gouts of water in all directions as her hooves drove down into them with a splat, and then tore off into the rainy night.

Caramel stared out the door after her with his jaw hanging loose, listening as the rapid, squishy patter of her hooves receded. He shook his head, sending another burst of flour into the air, turned and grasped the hook of his umbrella in his teeth, and charged out after her, calling her name. "Pfinkie!"

A moment later he came back, sheepishly closed the door and locked it, and then took off running again, the umbrella wildly thrashing over his head as he picked up his bright pink clad hooves.

The characters depicted in this fiction are copyright and trademarks of Hasbro, Inc. This is a work of fan fiction, and the author makes no claim on Hasbro's copyright or trademarks.

A My Little Pony - Friendship Is Magic Fan Fiction.

This story is set several years after the events depicted in Season 1.

Part 1

Pinkie Pie and her fiance Caramel prepare to send a care package to a dear friend who's expecting a foal.

Part 2 -> [link]
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GoofyRat Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2016
Thank you for the great MLP fan fiction it was well done and an interesting read.
Mark-Firehaven Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
I hd to click 3 links (and go through Equestria freaking Daily, my kindle hates it to death, though it works for my Pony needs, sad since if I am on an ED page too long it exits the internet), so this better be worth it has been my thoughts.

IT IS. :cookie:
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013
If it's any easier on ya, I've got all my pony fics up on FiM Fiction too. [link]

Glad you like it so far.
flaminpenguin316 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I am totally CarmelJack bit this was cute...
eeveel0ver Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"Pfinkie!" Spelling error!
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
Not an error, that's how he pronounces his fiancee's name with a mouth full of umbrella handle. :)
TalonCo Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2012  Student Filmographer
nuke1007 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012
well i think my pony would still be a better fiance for pinkie than caramel but i'm not a pony am i =( anyways so far so good i like the story =D
CodWars Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
GiromCalica Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Please add some cavemen writing, like this: "Sun give warm, sometimes give too much warm me go burn red. Oook, wear sunscreen. Sunscreen make no burn.
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Me no take requests.

Thank much for reading words I made on shiny box.
GiromCalica Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Caveman language does not have words like "I".
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Sure it do. Me use in sentence.

"Thog get pedantic with me, so me poke him in I with sharp stick."
GiromCalica Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Use sentence for story plis.
If don't, you die in seven days or shit like failing.
But enough this. Me ask you add rock talk to funnier story this. OR use in other little horsy fiction.
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
Are you trying to do some kind of chain letter thing with me? "Add this sentence or else bad fortune will befall you?"

If that is the case then please take your shenanigans elsewhere, for I have neither the time nor inclination to entertain them further.
GiromCalica Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nah, just fucking with you.
lol, we had a great chatting here, did we?
Luffy-Kun Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I am not really a CarmelPie fan, but you make it cute. I don't really read hetero MLP but I made an exception here because I do love me some FlutterMac.

Such a pity you couldn't throw in a little femmeslash on the side though. Lol.
DracoDei Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Another of my brief comments: The pairing makes a lot of sense here... the Pony who is always losing stuff with the one who frequently knows where things are, regardless of if it would make sense or not.
anzul Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011
great fic dude!! :D
theath2k Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2011  Student General Artist
BAHAHAHA!!! Pink Celestia toy reference!!! OHHH you make me laugh WarrenHutch. So. Hard.

+1 ponynets :icondashishappyplz:
Mike-Rosoft Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2015
For an added bonus, Princess Celestia is indeed pink. Extremely light (off-white) pink - you'd probably have to take a screenshot or a printed page of her, and compare her color with a pure white background to notice - but pink nonetheless.
HolyCross9 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2011
Pinkie Pie still gives Gummy his bath, dispite the fact that he's now a full-grown into a viscious looking adult crocodile?
HolyCross9 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
I find it interesting that you've pair Caramel with Pinkie Pie.
Kairi-Chai Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011
So much of this reminds me of my dear Geoff and I. XD
RagingSeraphim Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Are you Griffon?
Kairi-Chai Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
I'm sorry??
RagingSeraphim Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
It's a Roosterteeth thing. I guess you're not.
Kairi-Chai Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012
-shrugs- Okie dokie.
paxtofettel Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2011
Caramel and Pikie? I like it! (even though I prefer CaramelxApplejack)
Vampire-ette Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2011  Student General Artist
Lol at " I know celestia isnt pink but tell Hasbro" i saw the pink celestia toys lolfail
ClockwiseGear Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Dangit! Why can't I think of Caramel's voice? Eh, whatever. I'll just use Bic Mac's

ANYWAYS, this looks like it will be interesting. And as stated before, the engagement earring and pink Celestia are clever touches.
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2011
Probably because he might have had all of half a line in the first season. (I think he was one of the ponys pulling the girls' carriage to the Grand Galloping Gala.)

I don't imagine him sounding like Big Mac, but YMMV. I'm kind of drawing a blank on who he would sound like, tho...

Definitely younger and more innocent sounding, slightly dim without being duhh.
hyousai Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011
If I recall, he had a pretty deep rough voice.

Look up "caramel excuse me" on youtube.
ClockwiseGear Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That would explain it.
RagingSeraphim Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
Caramel: Yeah! You always run out!
karaterachel Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
My two favorite things in this: engagement earrings. Clever. Also, Princess Celestia isn't pink. -snort-
EvilPaladin11 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Engagement ear ring? *shrug* I guess they need something that the three (four if you count zebra seperate from earth pony) can use.
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Well, I was gonna make note of an engagement ring in the text, but then I remembered... "Oh yeah. Hooves..."
MagicaITrevor Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
XD Okay, Trevor can read this! *Goes on to chapter 2*
kamenriderculamon Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
An unexpected pairing but I'm more surprised with the fact that they have to wrestle a grown up Gummy from the bog to the bathtub at Sugarcube Corner every week.
That's gotta be a sight to see.
WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Any visitor from elsewhere in Equestria would probably watch the scene unfold with eyes wide and jaws dropped.

The denizens of Ponyville would probably shrug and say "Oh, right, it's Thursday."
Deviatealittle Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
While piny caramel gets a big "meh" from me, I REALLY like where this is going. 10 chapters to go. Lets do this.
Deviatealittle Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
pinky/caramel* (whoops)
BradNeko14 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Silly Hasbro Celestia isn't pink hahaha
PatRoison Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Pinkie and Caramel are really cute here. It looks like I have a lot of reading ahead of me. This is going to be :iconso-awesomeplz:!
TempestRunner Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Damn, sh**'s 'bout to go down.
Lurks-no-More Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Caramel and Pinkie? Unexpected couple, but they come off very sweetly here. It's a promising start, I'd say!
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