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Part 13 - Connecting Flights

The rich velvet curtains by the doorway rustled imperceptibly, parting and falling closed as the princesses settled themselves on an elegant divan and motioned Twilight, Rarity, and their companions to make themselves comfortable on the richly brocaded cushions scattered about the opulent lounge suite reserved for the royal sisters and their guests.

Princess Celestia gave her prized student an encouraging smile and gave a bob of her tapering horn. "Now, Twilight, what is this matter that you and your friends would like to bring to our attention?"

At her side, Princess Luna sat with a look of guarded interest on her dusky face. "Yeah, lay it on us."

The scholarly unicorn mare smiled back, and her violet eyes began to gleam as her horn sparkled to life. "I'd like to start by thanking your Highnesses on behalf of myself, Rarity, and the employees and friends of Harmony Aeronautics, a new company that we founded under town charter in Ponyville to develop a breakthrough in applied spellcasting that will allow all types of ponies to enjoy the benefit of winged flight. We present to you, the Harmony Aeronautics Personal Flight Harness."

With that, a glittering spark floated off the tip of her horn and drifted between her and the royal sisters. It began to draw a glowing outline of a pony in the air, filling the room with a cool, bluish light. Once the equine profile was completed, the gleaming dot, which looked like a firefly but moved with crisp purpose, traced out a schematic of the wings and harness around it. The spark then moved on to trace out a series of magical equations and diagrams in the air beside it.

Twilight's voice took on a discursive quality as she continued. "The basic principle originates with a spell authored in the third century A.R.C. by Princess Ascendia the Ever Hopeful. By deconstructing its component elements, I was able to isolate the animation and control sub-spells, update them to a modern standard, and apply them to a pre-constructed wearable apparatus, replacing Ascendia's spell woven membrane and arcano-biological interface."

Rarity stepped forward and sparked her own horn to life, sending a wave of thrumming glitter toward the diagram. As soon as her silvery blue magic touched the outline, it produced a small pop as it became a three dimensional representation of a pony, taking on something of Pip's likeness. The wings it wore began to beat steadily, raising the little figure up off its hooves to circle through the air in a lazy figure eight.

The elegant, alabaster mare cleared her throat and gave the sister sovereigns a winning smile, batting her sapphire blue eyes at them. "We were rather hoping that we might obtain a Royal Charter for our company to further develop this idea. Properly funded, and with your Highnesses' support, we feel that our flight harness will be nothing short of transformative for Equestrian society."

She conjured more tiny, illusory ponies over their heads, a flock of pegasi hovering above a small herd of earth ponies and unicorns. One by one, winged harnesses appeared on the ground bound ponies, and one by one they took off and rose up to join the pegasi in the air. Soon all the little flying ponies were happily playing together in the domed vault of the chamber beneath the crystal chandelier.

Rarity drew herself up, her mannered tone replaced by a rising, oratory flourish. "No longer will ponies of different sorts be stranded apart from one another. No longer will the pegasi be all alone in the skies." A pair of smaller pegasi flew in close to a tiny pink mare in her illusion, nuzzling her cheeks as tiny hearts popped into existence over the little family.

The elegant unicorn's voice cracked slightly as she concluded. "No longer will the mothers and fathers of winged foals be forced to remain grounded as their children play overhead, out of their reach." She pulled a silk hoofkerchief from among the layered folds of her stole and dabbed at her glistening eyes as a hush fell over the royal salon.

With a slight wave of her horn, Princess Celestia summoned one of the tiny, flight harness wearing illusions closer, examining it with interest. "Well, this is certainly an intriguing proposition, girls. The wing design is definitely clever."

At this, Rarity drew herself up proudly. "I made a small contribution to the current harness' overall aesthetic, but the majority of the credit goes to our ingenious chief engineer, Apple Bloom."

A muffled growl sounded from behind the curtains, unnoticed by everypony in the room, as the young handymare gave a halting bow of her elegantly beribboned head to the princesses. "Aw shucks, yer Highnesseses, I ain't no in-genius. I was just puttin' stuff together how it made th' best sense. Twilight's th' one who came up with th' idea n' cast th' spells, n' Rarity's our big picture gal, in addition t' makin' the wings that go on my framework."

Her blush flickered redder as she glanced over at her handsome escort, who gave her a jaunty smile. "And y'all gotta give Pip here his due testin' 'em out."

At this, Princess Luna gave the young stallion a wry grin with a twinkle in her eye. "Why Pip, that sounds terribly risky! Didn't I give you enough thrills and chills on Nightmare Night all these years?"

If the moon princess noticed Apple Bloom's eyes flaring and her ears laying back, she didn't deign to show it, perking her indigo ears attentively as Princess Celestia directed a question at the young mare's elder sister. "So, Applejack. What is your part in this venture?"

The blonde farm mare met her sovereigns' eyes with a frank gaze. "I reckon I'm th' voice o' reason, which is the whole reason Twi n' Rarity asked me along."

She cast a brief, blush tinged glance at Soarin', before continuing with a grave expression on her face "I ain't completely convinced a pony that ain't been born with a set o' wings can come t' much but trouble n' tears by strappin' on a set o' fake ones n' takin' t' th' sky."

The honest farmer gave the lavender unicorn a pained look. "I watched Twi test out this watchamacallit o' theirs and I was plumb afeared that she was gonna break her neck if it weren't for a bit o' good luck and a pile o hay bales. I reckon if more ponies get their hooves on this thing, there's gonna need t' be a lot more hay stacks 'round Equestria."

The princess of the sun raised a hoof to silence Rarity and Twilight's protest, as she kept her benign gaze on the blonde earth pony. "So you think what your friends are doing is dangerous? Too dangerous to continue? Do you think this "flight harness" is too dangerous for a pony to use?"

At this, Applejack gave a shrug. "I can't honestly say, yer highness. Twilight's th' smartest pony I ever did meet, n' Rarity n' Apple Bloom are pretty durn sharp as well. I reckon I trust 'em to work it out such that these wingdings o' theirs work pretty good. Still, I think it's wise t' consider that ponies that ain't so sharp get into plenty o' trouble with their four hooves on the ground. What'll it be like if'n th' same pony folk took t' th' air?"

Soarin tentatively cleared his throat, drawing the others' attention. "If... uh... if I could interrupt for a second, your royal highnesses..."

Princess Luna gave him a nod. "Please do, Lieutenant Soarin. My sister and I would be interested in getting a pegasus' perspective on this."

The sky blue stallion ruffled his wings. "Well, I guess I'll add that being born with wings doesn't keep a lot of pegasi from taking the occasional dirt dive." He tugged at the collar of his tux with a pained look on his face. "As a certain... uh... recent incident at the Fillydelphia Hippodrome might tell you, even the Wonderbolts aren't immune to it."

A wry smile flashed across Applejack's freckled face. "I reckon that's true. Even Rainbow Dash used t' take th' occasional header into the hillsides n' such."

Princess Celestia spoke to him with a searching gaze. "So do you approve, or disapprove of what Twilight Sparkle, Rarity, and Apple Bloom are doing?"

Soarin raised his head slightly as he replied. "Oh, I definitely approve, because of something Miz Rarity said a minute ago."

He met the princesses' eyes with a level gaze. "You see, your Highnesses, I'm what the pegasi in Cloudsdale call a threebee, a balloon basket baby. I was given up for adoption by my parents, probably 'cos they couldn't fly. Odds are they were earth ponies like the Apple sisters here."

At this, Applejack laid a gentle hoof on his shoulder. "Not like us, sugarcube. We Apples don't cast away kin so lightly."

He gave her a fond smile, before he turned again to face the princesses with a tentative shrug. "Maybe my parents didn't want to deal with a kid who'd always be out of reach. Maybe they just wanted me to grow up among my own kind. I dunno."

He turned to give Rarity and Twilight a nod. "But if this invention of theirs makes more earth ponies or unicorns with kids like me think twice about givin' 'em up, I'm willing to give it the high hoof."

Princess Celestia met the sky blue stallion's gaze with bottomless warmth radiating from her smile. "We appreciate your candor, Lieutenant."

She shifted in her seat and shared a wistful look with her dusky sister. "I'd wager poor old Clover would have given anything for a set of these when she was looking after the two of us, eh Luna?"

The moon princess let out a chuckle of nostalgia. "That, or some filly sized lead horseshoes."

The regent of the sun smiled in shared mirth. "I think Cookie might have suggested that once or twice."

Her expression became calm and businesslike. "So, getting back on the topic of a charter for this enterprise, what do you think, my most royal sister and co-ruler?"

The regent of the moon tapped her hoof on the arm of their divan with a thoughtful expression. "I think I'd like to see this device in action before I give my full approval."

Her elder sibling gave a genteel nod. "I agree. I think a demonstration is in order. Could you possibly have one prepared for us in... say... a week's time?"

Rarity drew herself up with a toss of her luxurious mane. "But of course, your highnesses."

Twilight held up a hoof. "Wait a minute, Rarity..." She looked at the princesses with a small furrow of concern in her brow. "Begging your hignesses' pardon, but what sort of demonstration are you expecting?"

Princess Celestia gave her former protege a fond smile. "You never disappoint me, my faithful student. It's always better to find out the question before providing an answer."

She cocked her head in thought for a moment, before giving the principals of Harmony Aeronautics a nod. "I suppose we could start with the basic pegasus F.A.T. and then see some performance tests for things like speed, maneuverability... and safety, of course..."

Twilight nodded eagerly. "Of course. Yes, I think we can furnish a demonstration by then. What do you say, Chief Engineer Apple Bloom?"

The young mare tore her eyes away from darting anxiously between Pip and Princess Luna and replied to the lavender unicorn with a distracted nod. "Oh... uh... yeah, I reckon we can be good t' go by then."

The red headed handymare's expression darkened as the regent of the night spoke up. "Excellent, I'm looking forward to seeing Pip go through his paces. I'm sure it will be quite a show."

Princess Celestia smiled up at the chandelier above their heads as it dimmed three times to signal the end of the intermission was fast approaching. "And speaking of shows, it's time we got back to our seats. Come along, my dear ones..."

With that, they all stood and filed out of the salon. Princess Luna hung back a few hoofbeats, sidling up to Apple Bloom as they headed down the plushly carpeted hall.

She waved Pip away with a bob of her horn. "I'm gonna borrow your filly for a minute, okay Pip?"

The young stallion cocked a curious eyebrow, then gave a bow and trotted off to join the others. The princess of the night draped a wing across the red headed mare's stiffly bunched shoulders and leaned in to whisper in her laid back ear. "Quite the fine hunk of stallion, isn't he?"

Apple Bloom went pale, then red. "Uh... I... Uh... I ain't sure that's uh... proper for me t' be discussin' with y'all, yer highness..."

Princess Luna gave her a gentle squeeze and continued with a warm smile. "Well, to me he'll always be the same little colt in a pirate costume I met just a decade ago. You could stand to chill out a little, Miss Apple, I'm no cradle robber."

The young earth pony's ears drooped. "I... I'm sorry, Princess. I didn't mean no disrespect..."

The dusky sovereign let out a silvery chuckle. "No harm done. We're cool. Just remember that jealousy gets you nowhere." She gave Apple Bloom a wink. "I should know."

The red headed mare nodded solemnly to her. "I... I reckon y'all're right, Princess. I guess I got a li'l worked up 'cos of th' looks  all th' mares have been givin' him."

Princess Luna smiled fondly at her. "The same looks you should be giving him at point blank range, sweetheart, instead of watching all those other mares who didn't make it across home plate. My nights are much better when they're shared with one pony rather than a whole roomful."

The princess of the moon bobbed her horn toward Pip. "Now why don't you run along and catch up with your gentlecolt, the stars are right for romance tonight."  

She paused, tapping her hoof on her chin thoughtfully. "That is, if I remembered to point Sagittarius in the right direction..."

Apple Bloom grinned and bowed her head in a curtsey. "Thank y' kindly, Princess. I think I know why yer Pip's favorite. I reckon y'all're mine too."

Princess Luna smiled fondly as she gave the young mare a courtly nod, releasing her to canter back to her handsome escort's side. The dusky sovereign of the night's smile widened as the red headed earth pony leaned in to whisper in Pip's ear, causing a blush to appear on his coltish face.

***

Back in the royal salon, the velour curtains moved as if blown by the wind, and the muffled sound of a young mare's voice could be heard, tinged with dawning horror. "Oh horse apples. Horse apples horse apples horse apples horse apples."

The drapes flew aside, to the sound of galloping hooves across the thick carpet and out into the hallway, gaining speed as a steady undertone murmur of "Horse apples horse apples horse apples." sounded out.

Midway down the dimly lit corridor there was a startled cry and the sound of a pony stumbling, and a gold sequined horseshoe with a crimson bow materialized out of the air. The galloping resumed, now a bit uneven, along with the undertone cursing, and made its way down the hall toward the stair, leaving the shoe behind.

The disembodied hoof falls clattered at the marble steps, accompanied by a loud whoop of alarm and dismay which was followed by a series of bonks, smacks, and thuds that proceeded down the sweeping staircase. "AGH! HORSE APPLES! HORSE! OW! APPLES! HORSE APPLES! OW! OW! OW!"

At the bottom, an usher in his red velvet vest and black tie was bowled over as if he'd been tackled low across the shins. A shriek of indignation rang out as he flailed on the ground, entangled with something unseen. "YEEK! Watch those hooves, mister!"

The hapless unicorn's skull rang with a blow that left a hoof shaped welt on his cheek, and he slumped insensate to the floor with tiny pegasi mares wearing horned helmets and braids orbiting his head as his eyes swirled in a daze. The sound of hoofsteps, now weaving a bit erratically, continued toward the curtained archways leading to the box seats. "Horse apples horse apples horse... ow... apples..."

***

Blueblood sat with a bored look on his aquiline face, immensely enjoying the company of his wife's empty seat. He cast a sidelong glance toward the royal box as the princesses and this evening's retinue of ponies returned to their places and settled in for the third act. He'd had a pinch or two of salt, a couple very dry martinis, and was well braced for more Wagonerian bombast.

He pursed his lips as his gaze lingered a moment on Rarity, shining like a star sapphire at Princess Luna's side. He'd never really liked her, since that unpleasant incident with the cake and the yelling and the squirrels, although he was more than willing to feign a genteel smile in her direction as she'd risen to prominence in Canterlot's high society. It was the princely thing to do, to shrug off slights to his person and appear detached and benevolent to all of lesser status. That, and he had a sneaking feeling that if the elite of Equestria were forced to choose between inviting him and his wife or inviting Rarity to their social functions, he would be stuck at home with Diamond Tiara a lot more than his sanity could probably take.

He suppressed a slight sigh. Recently he'd begun to feel an inkling of a new emotion whenever he saw the alabaster unicorn mare lighting up a soiree with her pristine looks and ready charm, an emotion he was unused to feeling: regret. If only he'd known years ago what he knew now, he could have had her for a bride instead of the shrieking, gold plated harpy his penury had forced him to SWEET CELESTIA'S SADDLE STRAP SOMETHING WAS TRYING TO BITE HIS EAR OFF!

The occupants of the surrounding boxes, including the princesses and their companions, all looked over as the expectant hush of the auditorium was broken by Prince Blueblood letting out a loud, strangled squawk. He jerked upright and did an odd kind of clumsy tumble over the back of his seat, vanishing from his box just as the lights went down. The onlooking crowd all exchanged puzzled glances, shrugged, and turned their attention toward the stage as the orchestra struck up for the overture.

***

The blonde unicorn stallion suppressed a gleeful grin as if his life depended on it, which indeed it did, as the sparkles of his magic faded to reveal Diamond Tiara standing unsteadily on three horseshoes, bruised and battered in a torn and tattered dress, her ruined coiffure hanging tangled and disheveled over her glaring eyes.

His lips tightened as he greeted her dryly, knowing full well he'd come to regret his choice of words and deciding it was more than worth it. "So... did you have fun with your little friend?"

A scowl that would send a chill down a windigo's ephemeral spine washed across the pink mare's features. "Apple Bloom can go get bucked with hobnailed army boots, we've got bigger problems."

Blueblood blinked at her, his brow furrowing at the intensity on his wife's face. "When you say "we" are you using the royal "we" or do you mean you and us both?"

The young mare let out a growl of frustration and grabbed him by his lapels. "I mean us, chowderhead, as in we're up to our necks in manure if we don't do something about what Celestia's pet nerd and that bedazzled clotheshorse you're always mooning about are up to."

A mild twitch fluttered at the unicorn stallion's eye as he replied in a small, shaky voice. "What... what are they up to?"

She pushed away and started limping out of the alcove. "Only putting the Royal Blue Airship Line in a deeper hole than when you were running it, dear. Now come on, we're going home. I need to think, and all that yodeling in there isn't doing my headache any favors."

***

The Royal Opera House exploded with the happy noise of a rearing ovation as the cast assembled on stage for the curtain call. The volume rose markedly, centered on the occupants of the royal box, as "Princess Celestia" stepped up to take her place in line.

Sweetie Belle beamed as waves of applause washed in from the audience like a thundering tidal surge of adulation. It would take the young opera singer a while to realize that tonight was the night where she had become an opera star with her unorthodox performance, but for now she was flush with satisfaction and a feeling that the ponies in attendance had genuinely enjoyed the show.

She looked up through the shower of blossoms and bouquets that were raining on the stage, and saw Equestria's beloved princesses smiling and laughing and clomping their gold and silver shod hooves, while at their side her dear sister Rarity stood looking ever so proud, dabbing at her eyes with a hoofkerchief. Her heart leapt with joy as she saw Apple Bloom and her big sister enthusiastically applauding as well, along with Twilight, the mare to whom she owed her inspiration for tonight's take on the libretto.

The earnest young mare turned toward the royal box, full of her favorite ponies stomping their hooves and cheering for her, and gave a deep bow.

Then promptly tipped forward onto her face in a rustling cascade of colorful gossamer and white samite.

***

The driving rhythm of the Ponyville Express' wheels on the tracks and the soft chugging of the engine added a soothing, metronome like cadence to the dimly lit, largely unoccupied train car. The quiet was like a cool drink of water after a long hot day playing in the sun to the Apple sisters and their escorts, who had excused themselves from the lavish cast party to return home to Ponyville on the last train of the day.

Rarity and Twilight had elected to stay behind in Canterlot, the former to savor the night's triumph and bask in the praise for her costume design, and the latter to spend more time with the princesses, both her beloved mentor and the longtime friend she'd found in the moon's mistress. This decision had given Applejack a considerable amount of relief, for while she was honest, she was still reluctant to admit to Rarity what she was about to admit to Soarin.

She pawed lightly at the bench she shared with the sky blue pegasus, a shy smile settling on her freckled face. "Y'know, I really liked that show tonight. All them monsters n' heroes n' magic rings n' whatnot. And the singin' was right purty. Sweetie Belle's always a treat t' listen to, but fer some reason I 'specially took a shine to that... that love song betwixt that earth pony hero feller with th' magic sword and that pegasus valwhatsit..."

Soarin gave her a wry smile. "Valkyrie."

The blonde mare nodded. "Yeah, that. I woulda never thought I'd enjoy oprey music so much."

She paused, glancing at the seat ahead of them, where Pip sat smiling contentedly out the window as the mountains whisked past, while Apple Bloom leaned against him, sound asleep and looking quite lovely in the moonlight with her tousled red mane cascading down his shoulder.

Applejack turned back toward Soarin, a faint blush blossoming on her cheeks. "And I also had a lot better time steppin' out all gussied up with y'all at my side, Mister Soarin."

The pegasus stallion smiled, his eyes tired but happy as he sat with his bow tie hanging loose and his mane slightly mussed. "I'm glad you did, Miss Applejack. And I gotta say, for a mare who says she doesn't go in for this sort of thing, you sure made it look like you were an old hoof at it."

She looked over at him with a wan expression. "I reckon y'all're used t' that sorta hifalutin' shindig, ain't ya?"

The pegasus stallion gave a noncommittal shrug. "More or less. I usually just hung around the buffet between photo ops. I was always just another Wonderbolt, nothin' but a set of wings in a blue and yellow suit."

The blonde earth pony rolled her eyes. "Just another Wonderbolt, he says. That's like sayin' a diamond's just another rock."

Soarin gave her a wry grin. "I'm kinda gettin' the impression you're a fan."

Applejack replied with a chuckle. "Well, hangin' out with Rainbow Dash all those years like I did... If'n y'all stand under a tree long enough some o' th' fruit's gonna drop on ya, so t' speak. So yeah, I reckon I'm a fan. Not on quite th' level o' memorizin' stats n' whatnot, but enough t' appreciate what y'all can do."

The sky blue stallion gave a sigh. "I guess that's why you were so disappointed when you met me for the first time."

The freckled mare cocked an eyebrow at him with a gentle smile. "I think y'all're forgettin' that the first time I met y'all was at that Grand Gallopin' Gala, when a handsome rookie Wonderbolt was th' first and only pony t' buy one o' my cart full o' apple treats. That was th' high point of th' evenin' for me."

She leaned over and gave him a playful nudge. "I mighta had my doubts after meetin' y'all again later, but seein' how nice y'all clean up I think I did a li'l jumpin' t' conclusions."

Soarin smiled back. "Well, I never doubted for a moment that you're an amazing mare, I'm just having trouble believing that I was lucky enough to get to go out on a date with you tonight."

Applejack met his gaze, green eyes looking deep into green eyes, as her voice came low and sweet like honey and cider. "Believe it, darlin'. It's th' honest t' goodness truth."

They leaned in toward one another, their eyelids drifting shut as their lips came closer and closer together. The train entered a mountain tunnel the moment they touched, plunging the passenger car and the whole world away into darkness and leaving mare and stallion alone together.


The characters depicted in this fiction are copyright and trademarks of Hasbro, Inc. This is a work of fan fiction, and the author makes no claim on Hasbro's copyright or trademarks.

A My Little Pony - Friendship Is Magic Fan Fiction.

This story is set three years after the events described in Windfall -> [link]

Part 13 - Connecting Flights

A pitch is made
A fall is taken
A crisis is recognized
A performance is applauded
And the best part of the evening comes afterward

Part 14 -> [link]
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Luckysweep Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012
So we know what happened to Diamond Tiara. She is still an evil little *buy some apples* who is now married to a bigger *buy some more apples*.

But where is Silver Spoon?
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
Back in Ponyville. There's a convoluted headcanon there that may or may not be dealt with in this tale. Long story short, DT pretty much discarded her for loftier ambitions. Sad, really. :(
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Luckysweep Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012
PLEASE have her at least appear. I don't care if she's friend or enimy, I just want to know how she ended up.
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Petewein Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012
Hey just out of curiosity what's A.R.C stand for?
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012
Anno Regia Celestia :)
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Petewein Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012
In the year of our Ruler Celestia. Nice
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FluttershyWorshipper Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2012
"The same looks you should be giving him at point blank range, sweetheart, instead of watching all those other mares who didn't make it across home plate. My nights are much better when they're shared with one pony rather than a whole roomful."
nudge nudge wink wink knowhatimean
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ShadowLDrago Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2014
Considering Apple Bloom is no fool, or foal, she does know waht our dear dusky regent means
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dmallard76 Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
So we've seen two if the CMC, will we have a cameo by Scootaloo as well?
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Deviatealittle Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
"...gold plated harpy his penury had forced him to SWEET CELESTIA'S SADDLE STRAP SOMETHING WAS TRYING TO BITE HIS EAR OFF!"

Pffftt haha! Oh man, that is just great... Damn fine chapter! Great chapter. I love how poor Sweetie trips at the end of her bow, and wow, things just got a tad... conspiratorial, I guess? I'm amazed that you actually gave Blueblood and Diamond Tiara such believable and economical motivations to step up to the role of antagonists in the series, and some pretty comical ones at that.

Man, as usual, above and beyond expectations. Fan-flippin'-tastic chapter. Your characterizations of Luna and Celestia, and all the cast really are just to die for.

The only tiny quibble I could level against this chapter is that at times AJ's accented diction and enunciation is just a bit... over the top? It just reads so heavy, and yeah AJ has an accent in the show, but it's not THAT pronounced all the time. It's a bit distracting, is all. But like I said, almost insignificant remark compared to the rest of the chapter.
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
I've been getting a few comments about AJ's dialect, and I'll try to twiddle the knobs on it so it's a bit more natural. Gotta ease off on the "y'all"s. :)

I've got another character in a non-pony related context who speaks in a southern/cowboy/rural patois, and I intentionally use "y'all" a lot more frequently with her as a complex inside joke with myself, and I think that tends to bleed into AJ and Apple Bloom's speech.
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Rock-Raider Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
Nice chapter. Glad that the Apple Sisters have gotten closer to the stallions of their dreams (especially Applejack). Let's hope they are quite happy together.

BTW, I imagine Soarin' may eventually end up working at Sweet Apple Acres. I would've thought he'd blow the apples off the trees by using a slipstream, but I don't think that would work. Couldn't help but think of it though.''

However, I imagine Applejack might catch him looking at other Pegasi, and wonder what's going on. Perhaps she might think he's checking out the Pegasus mares. Perhaps she might ask, and Soarin' would tell her about what Rainbow Dash is afraid of regarding other Pegasi and her fear of what they might do if they found out about the flight harness.

Speaking of the flight harness, I think I know what Diamond Tiara might do. I think she might sabotage the flight harness so it malfunctions in mid-air during the demonstration, causing Pip to fall and become severely injured. This would not only cause the Princesses to withdraw their charter, but as a double whammy to spite Apple Bloom, the accident could be engineered to disfigure Pip's face, so Apple Bloom won't have a handsomer husband than Diamond Tiara.

Of course, that could also be a test of what Pip and Apple Bloom mean to each other. I still wouldn't want that to happen, but what do you think?
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
I think, and I say this in as kindly a fashion as I can with all my gratitude that you're willing to come over and read my stuff, that you ought to stop trying to write the story for me and just wait and see what happens. :)
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Rock-Raider Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
Sure, sorry. Those are guesses as to what I think will happen next, really. Sorry all the same.
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
It's all cool. :)

I just don't want you to be too disappointed when it doesn't turn out how you predict. ;)

Like I said, I'm glad you're reading, and am glad you're engaged enough to want to conjecture about it. Stay tuned for more as it develops.
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Fiction-Reader Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
Awesome stuff!
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HobbesTCat Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
dammit!! EDQ put you in the story updates again by accident. Talk about a tease. I totally thought there was another update!
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
Yeh.
For some reason when I submit the updates the links get derped half the time. I emailed EQD about it yesterday and they said they'd just fix it at the next Story Update.

Sorry for any disappointment.
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bubblesage Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
so, either blue has some major magic mojo, or the sisters are benignly 'ignorant' :-) also i really like this. though, wouldn't every pony be considered cradled comparatively?
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
I'm not quite getting what you mean by "wouldn't every pony be considered cradled comparatively"
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HobbesTCat Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
I think he means, wouldn't anyone that Luna or Celestia went for be considered cradle robbed, considering their age. Oh and, Whoooohooooo. Go AJ & Soarin!!
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
Ah, that makes sense.

And yes, that's exactly what Luna is saying. Even Granny Smith is a baby compared to her and her sister.
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Richforce Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
nice job
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Kamari-Akuma Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
lol poor Blueblood, he could be freaking assassinated and the whole place wouldn't have cared XD

also, Royal Blue Airship Line? sounds like Diamond Tiara is trying to revive a ten week old carcass with what she's probably plotting (just a guess though)

Luna conutinues to be a riot, and more ApplejackxSoarin love :iconfluttershysqueeplz:
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rjpugh Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
Perhaps Blueblood and DT should *invest* in Harmony Aeronautics? If they run an airship cruise line, guided flights using the wings could be offered, in much the way real-world cruise lines offer scuba and snorkel dives. Or, places like Cloudsdale could be added to the ports-of-call, with the wings making it possible for earthpony and unicorn passengers to "go ashore" and enjoy what the sky towns have to offer. Diamond Tiara needs to put her hatred aside for a moment and realize that there is a good business opportunity to be had here.

But knowing DT, she would rather kill the company before it gets anywhere. Oddly enough, Blueblood might actually be open to the idea of investing. Any source of income is worth considering. As others have said, it would be ironic and refreshing for Blueblood to end up being the "good guy" in this case.
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Pinkiekeen Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
If I may make one little critique as a southerner, we don't say "y'all" in every sentence. We can say "you" and "ya". Sorry, it's just tough to read as a southerner knowing we don't say that. Rednecks are not the only people living here.
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
I'll own that y'all is kind a point that I grind on with a "rural" dialect. I'll try to refine my use of it. :)
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Pinkiekeen Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
Thank you! Trust me, I've grown up around rednecks my whole life but even that was a little tough to read lol.
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saeth-kaleanae Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
Euch... We're gonna see some sabotaging then? I think this would have been one story I would have been fine with not having any conflict. Oh well, its pure personal preference, that.

I am glad though that you are not making Blueblood out to be a total jerk. You are gong that way with Diamond Tiara it seems, but we'll see.
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Deltathewolf Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
A storm is brewing on the horizon, but for now, our ponies enjoy the night.

-Delta-
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dmallard76 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
I'm loving this story more and more. Just out of curiosity, now that this is your longest story to date, how long do you anticipate this story being?

I also agree that you should put this and all your other stories on fimfiction.net
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012
Can't rightly say how long this is gonna be. I've got a story arc in mind that may go for several more chapters, but I don't know how long it'll take to get from point A to point B.

I'll consider getting these up on fimfiction.net. It's all about bringing in the eyeballs, after all. :)
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Regidrian Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
Heh, you know if you actually did put this on FiMfic you'd probably get into the Feature Box and never leave.
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HolyCross9 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
Also, I'd personally pair Rarity with Braeburn. My reasons are that I believe that Braeburn is a stallion that has all the qualifications that Rarity seeked for the stallion of her dreams: handsome, courtesy, gentility, kindness, and respectable. Qualities that Blueblood obviously lacked at Rarity's first time at the GGG, making Braeburn a far better genltecolt that he would ever be.
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
Mmm. I don't quite agree with that line of thought, but to each his own. Seems better explored in your own space than as a non-sequitor in my comment thread. :)

The biggest strike against shipping Rarity & Braeburn, were I to allow myself to be spontaneously drawn into that discussion, is that Appleloosa is even farther away from Canterlot than Ponyville, Rarity considers herself a Canterlot pony at heart, and Braeburn is highly enthusiastic about his hometown. You'd have to watch a lot of "Green Acres" to convince yourself that it would work out.
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HolyCross9 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012
Alright, thank you for your input. Change of subject: why didn't Spike attend that night's opera?
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
A: The Princesses were right there and wouldn't need any documents sent via "dragon mail"

B: Opera bores Spike out of his spiny draconic skull. He was happier staying home and organizing his longboxes that night.

C: As I stated elsewhere, six protagonists, two antagonists, and two immortal princesses are plenty of characters to maneuver around one another, and Spike's presence wouldn't really have added much to the proceedings.
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HolyCross9 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
Alrighty. What's a longbox, by the way?
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WarrenHutch Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
For the storage of comic books.
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HolyCross9 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2012
Ah, of course.
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HolyCross9 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
I'm glad that both Royal sisters liked the Harmony Aeronautics' idea and want a future demonstration of it too.

In addition, I am fearful how Diamond Tiara could possibly ruin such a demonstration in the future.

In addition, although it was nice seeing Applejack and Soarin' getting their first kiss in this parallel universe, I still like SoarinDash a little more.
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jsk001 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
He gets EqD frontpage on his updates, I think people are seeing it :D

Anyway, on to the story comments: I must say that you played the pitch ponies pretty perfectly (mostly because of alliteration temptation :D) and I'm loving how Luna ended up over-adapting away from the High Style to be by far the more casual of the two. If anyone was betting on Rarity's ploys paying off, they just won millions of bits. Lets face it, AJ and Soarin had some LONG odds on that. Can't wait to see what comes of DT/BB coming against Harmony Aeronautics, either. Yeesh, there is a GOOD reason I jump to read these updates whenever I get the ping. Very good work once more!
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Rune9510 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
another excellent chapter! you really should put your stories on FimFiction! these need to be read by more people!
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MoochiinLove Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
Awwwww, I absolutely love the romance!! And if Rarity could have seen it, I know she would be doing a little dance and probably squealing with joy! I am glad Applebloom finally made a move and Soarin' and Applejack finally see some kind of love towards each other!

I did so love the explanation that Twilight and Rarity gave to the princesses when they gave their pitch and I did choke up a bit when Rarity cried at mentioning families not having to be seperate anymore. But now I am super nervous! I am guessing Blueblood probably almost bankrupted his airfleet and had to marry DT to get some money back into his business. Thus the two are using each other, Blueblood really in it for the money and DT wanting to say she is a 'princess'. Who knows what she will do to stop the company, especially since she still has such hatred for Applebloom and seems to hate to see her succeed in any fashion.

Also, very nice touch having Blueblood feel regret over ruining his chances with Rarity. I am sure if he would have shaped up and apoligized to her, the two would be a whole lot closer. But now she is the 'pony everyone should know' and he's the pony no one really wants to know or have around at all, especially with DT around.
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GammaEradon Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
I've said it before and I'll say it again, I just love Pip in this. Really, I do.

The Blueblood/D. Tiara pairing is unique and disturbing on a number of levels. Not the age gap but just the fact that BLUEBLOOD might be the good cop of the duo. Yeesh.

Can't wait to read more of this! You're one of my favorite MLP authors!
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hexxed-Quill Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
Pure gold, as usual =) I love the way you write Princess Luna, she's a hoot!
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